The Crystal Caves

Okay, so, I give the manuscript and synopsis to my dad to read and he is dead set against me sending this piece out as is. He says it screams amateur (I say truth in advertising) and that it's not ready.
So, I've had offers in the past from some friends on here, but don't want to assume anything.

Would anyone be willing to read my Titanic novella and beta for me??? Synopsis too, btw. I really wanted to send this out tonight, but now I'm not so sure.

Part of me wants to say it's because it's not like anything I've ever written before that he's objecting to it, but I just don't know. He also said that I have about fifteen to 20 years before my writing matures to the point that it'll be published.

If you are willing, please PM me or email me with your email so I can send the attachments. They're too big to put up on here as private entries.

So while I still doubt that Chris (pit boss) and Cody (security) would approve or appreciate the fact that I'm using them as the models for my two main characters in my slash novel, they also seem to be rather intent on giving me material to use as well. Cody wasn't supposed to work tonight, the new guy was, but Cody got called in - which made me really happy because I absolutely love working with him. And, having Chris as the pit boss for the night was an added bonus. Those two together are hilarious. They like to prank each other. And, I found out tonight, seem to have a rather serious fascination with each other's asses.
I already knew this about Cody. He's hooked a chain into Chris's back pocket, securing him to a table. That was so funny I almost fell out of my chair laughing. Chris retaliated by pouring hand sanitizer down Cody's back. Tonight, Cody stuck a cut card (like a plain plastic playing card) in Chris's back pocket and we timed how long it took him to notice. (11 minutes, btw). Chris retaliated by erasing and then kneeing Cody. I interviened at that point because I didn't want Cody hurt. Hence the nickname "mom" even though I'm younger than Chris.
Cody then spanked Chris with the clipboard they keep in the pit for paperwork. I don't remember what Chris did next, or even if he did anything. But he came over to the cage when he knew I was on the phone with Jeremy and Cody doing paperwork and asked if we knew how fun it was to know something about someone that they don't know, but will be finding out very soon. It turns out that the new guy - who was supposed to work tonight - never turned in all his paperwork and will be fired here really soon. Especially after he showed up drunk at the casino with his new girlfriend and started causing problems.
When I mentioned to Chris how much I loved working with him and Cody because they were so fun to watch, he commented that I should see them naked. My first thought was "is this an offer?" but, because I keep really quiet about my slash reading/writing at work, I just groaned. That's when Chris and Cody decided that this was a weak spot for me and they needed to keep going. When I mentioned I had images in my head that I didn't need, Cody added that I should picture leather straps and red rubber balls. Chris, who was standing next to Cody at the time dropped his pen and started laughing, totally confusing the two dealers at the table. Then, later, Chris added on that he didn't mean they were totally naked together, they had oil on. That, I have to admit, gave me ideas - none of them repeatable in the work place - but I hadn't even thought about body oil for my novella, or a fan fiction piece. I'll have to see what I can come up with using that. So not going to tell Chris that he'd get the credit for it though.
I don't remember how this part came up, oh, yeah I do. The day floor kicked some guy out of the casino for being drunk and no paperwork was done on it. I was telling Chris that I wrote something up to cover the bases and mentioned that when the pit boss (my old surveillance officer and the manager's sister) went over to talk to the guy, she touched his back. That's a HUGE no-no. You never, ever touch a customer. Also, you call surveillance so we can watch and make sure they don't get decked - or worse. So Chris, being Chris, said "you mean touching like this?" and started rubbing Cody's ass. Cody, of course, started moaning. I hit both of them with my clipboard.
What can I say, I love these guys.